Beebs52 wrote: ↑Wed Jul 26, 2023 3:44 pm
Bob Juch wrote: ↑Wed Jul 26, 2023 3:40 pm
Beebs52 wrote: ↑Wed Jul 26, 2023 3:19 pm
Finally got my phone to play. Have no idea what that was about.
Anyway, kudos on lyrics, but is it possible to get punchier music?
It may be your phone. Try a computer with good speakers.
I'm happy with the music. What precisely do you mean by "punchier"? Louder? Faster? I specified to the performers not to overwhelm the lyrics with the music. Name a band that's punchy.
I have more in the pipeline that may have your desired punch. I have one that's not part of the "Seasons of the Heart" album that I'll have recorded after the rest of my songs; that will take a few months. That's called
Love in the Key of Hell and will be heavy rock and roll.
Wowsers
Here are the lyrics. Imagine Joan Jett screaming them:
I tried an ABAB rhyme instead of my usual AABB.
140-150 BPM
(Verse 1)
A 2-5-1-6 progression in the key of A
Bm, E, A, F#m
They say our love was born from a whiskey haze,
On a night when the moon hung low and frail.
His heart was a lonely song, a wild, untamed blaze,
Singin' of love in the key of hell.
He walked in with a smile hot as the devil's own fire,
Eyes sparklin' like a lost star fell.
With every beat of my heart, I felt the burning desire,
Of a song of love in the key of hell.
(Chorus)
Bm, E, A, F#m
Oh, we're singin' love in the key of hell,
Where the heartache rings louder than a tolling bell.
Each touch was a flame, each word a spell,
In this twisted ol' dance of love in the key of hell.
(Verse 2)
Bm, E, A, F#m
His lips tasted of whiskey, but his promises were thin,
He knew how to play the sinner's tune so well.
As I swam in his charm, under a dim bar light's spin,
We lost ourselves in the dance of love in the key of hell.
(Chorus)
Bm, E, A, F#m
Love in the Key of Hell was our song,
Hotter than a Texas sun's cruel swell.
A twisted tale of right spun wrong,
In this crazy, burning love in the key of hell.
(Bridge)
A 4-5-6 progression in the key of A
D, E, F#m
Now every night, as the stars take their place,
In the silence of the jukebox's farewell.
My heart weeps, it sighs, and it aches,
For a love played in the key of hell.
(Chorus)
Bm, E, A, F#m
Yeah, we danced and loved in the key of hell,
In a flame that could outshine a wishing well.
But all that's left is a whiskey, bitter spell,
And a heart that still beats in the key of hell.
(Outro)
6-5-4 progression in the key of A
F#m, E, D
Here's to our dance, wild and frail,
Twisted up in love's rusted jail.
Oh, it's a cruel, cruel tale, with no avail,
Of our bitter-sweet love in the key of hell.